WIP SPOTLIGHT FOR September 7, 2012
Expectations and Other Moving Pieces by chrometurtle
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5440859/43/Expectations-and-Other-Moving-Pieces
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WIP SPOTLIGHT FOR JULY 30, 2012
WIP Spotlight for July 23, 2012
Expectations and Other Moving Pieces by chrometurtle
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5440859/43/Expectations-and-Other-Moving-Pieces
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Expectations and Other Moving Pieces is about an Edward and Bella who married for all the wrong reasons and it's made them both bitter, angry, desperate, and hurting. Honestly, this Bella is easy to dislike, but the way the author wrote her, I can understand Bella and the way she acted and continues to think. From flashbacks, you find out her story and how she ends up meeting Edward and ultimately, marrying him when she's pregnant with Jacob's baby while not at all in love with him.
This is a Bella who has almost always been deserted by the ones she loved and when she falls for her best friend, Jacob, she falls hard. Edward falls instantly in love with Bella when he first sees her. They don't become fast friends but are friendly towards one another - no, there's no attraction to Edward from Bella's way. She's all about Jacob - who really is her best friend.
Now, this Edward is pretty incredible and somewhat pitiful in his love for Bella. This smart, kind, loving Edward never had a girlfriend by choice. Girls never interested him until he sees Bella and he falls absolutely head over heels in love. He's pitiful, because his love wasn't returned by Bella and it made him want to keep her with him by marrying her even when he knew she didn't love him. This desperate and unreturned love turns him into the closed off, bitter, and angry man that we start seeing in the beginning of the story.
I really like this Edward, because after he has a crazy "head up the wazoo" moment or two, he actually starts to realize that he's as much at fault for his own bitterness and the way their marriage is currently at. He starts to help Bella, who has pretty much been in la la self-pity land since she lost Jacob and then later, after a tragic accident, become self-sufficient, self-aware, and self-confident.
I like this Bella, because after she's kicked out of la la land, she tries. She tries in little ways and big ways to not be a victim of the past and pretty much grow up. Yes, she still struggles and has her self pity moments, but she still tries. Now, the question is will she be strong enough to last. For Edward, it's will he be too afraid to admit that they can work if she is strong enough.
The plot is not new, but still good. The author does a good job of conveying the emotions of her characters pretty well. My only big issue with the story is that sometimes it's hard to tell when the flashbacks are happening, until you've already read a few lines into it. The flashback/memory scenes aren't really formatted any differently, so it can get a little confusing.
No cheating and I really hope it stays that way. This is one story where I would be devastated if either Edward or Bella were with other people, because their road has been rocky and washed out enough.
This is a Bella who has almost always been deserted by the ones she loved and when she falls for her best friend, Jacob, she falls hard. Edward falls instantly in love with Bella when he first sees her. They don't become fast friends but are friendly towards one another - no, there's no attraction to Edward from Bella's way. She's all about Jacob - who really is her best friend.
Now, this Edward is pretty incredible and somewhat pitiful in his love for Bella. This smart, kind, loving Edward never had a girlfriend by choice. Girls never interested him until he sees Bella and he falls absolutely head over heels in love. He's pitiful, because his love wasn't returned by Bella and it made him want to keep her with him by marrying her even when he knew she didn't love him. This desperate and unreturned love turns him into the closed off, bitter, and angry man that we start seeing in the beginning of the story.
I really like this Edward, because after he has a crazy "head up the wazoo" moment or two, he actually starts to realize that he's as much at fault for his own bitterness and the way their marriage is currently at. He starts to help Bella, who has pretty much been in la la self-pity land since she lost Jacob and then later, after a tragic accident, become self-sufficient, self-aware, and self-confident.
I like this Bella, because after she's kicked out of la la land, she tries. She tries in little ways and big ways to not be a victim of the past and pretty much grow up. Yes, she still struggles and has her self pity moments, but she still tries. Now, the question is will she be strong enough to last. For Edward, it's will he be too afraid to admit that they can work if she is strong enough.
The plot is not new, but still good. The author does a good job of conveying the emotions of her characters pretty well. My only big issue with the story is that sometimes it's hard to tell when the flashbacks are happening, until you've already read a few lines into it. The flashback/memory scenes aren't really formatted any differently, so it can get a little confusing.
No cheating and I really hope it stays that way. This is one story where I would be devastated if either Edward or Bella were with other people, because their road has been rocky and washed out enough.
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WIP SPOTLIGHT FOR JULY 30, 2012
Twilight on the Blue Lagoon by knicnort3
Bella was one of the popular sophomores in her high school, but when a class trip goes awry she finds herself marooned on a tropical island with Edward Cullen, the resident school geek. The two must overcome their differences and learn to work together in order to survive.
Just like the author says, "if you're a fan of 'Twilight' and 'Blue Lagoon', this is the story for you!" Only 6 chapters in, but already very entertaining. We immediately meet popular Bella and see how bitchy and mean she can be when her best friend, Tanya, tries to hide from school geek and loser, Edward, who has a crush on Tanya. This Edward is not the Edward we are used to. From Bella's description, we know is he short, chubby and wears a retainer causing him to lisp. OMG - I don't know whether to laugh in disbelief at this Edward or wiggle with anticipation at the changes you know will happen to Edward physically later on on a deserted island.
The banter between Bella and Edward in "Twilight on the Blue Lagoon" is just too funny. They get into this situation when Edward tries to save Bella when she falls overboard during a biology class trip on a ship. The problem is Edward can't swim, so instead of jumping in after her, he unties the dingy to row after her. Of course, it happens at night and no one is around, and klutzy Edward drops the paddle. By the time Bella wakes up, it's morning and the ship is nowhere in sight. After 2 days adrift on the boat in the boiling sun with no water (clean drinkable water) and food, Bella spots an island. Since there's no paddle, they can't steer the dingy so thy have to swim. Remember, Edward can't swim so it looks like bitchy Bella's going to have to save... or maybe not. haha.
The author first posted this story about 3 weeks ago, so she's been updating frequently enough for those readers like me who won't touch a WIP until it's completed. Knicnort3 has a history of finishing the stories that she starts, so for any reader who is hesitant at least keep this story on alert. She does promise yummy island lemons! yay!
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WIP Spotlight for July 23, 2012
How to Paint a House by Maggie's Gutter
Bella Swan is a naive fifteen year old, set to spend another kiss-less summer alone. Edward is new to town and doesn't know a soul. Watch an unlikely friendship blossom over the simple task of painting a house. But for these two, nothing is simple.
Journey along with Bella as she learns things won't always stay the same the summer between freshman and sophomore year of high school. She finds she's the odd man out when her best friend decides boys and bikinis were her priority and tumbles into her first real crush with the new to town 17 year old Edward. She first meets Edward when he comes to paint her house after Charlie breaks his leg. Did you ever have THAT boy in school that was so good-looking, so cute, you couldn't help but have fantasies about him? The one you dressed up for even though you know he'll never look at you "that way"? Well, that is Edward to this young Bella.
I think the author is doing a fantastic job of portraying the teen voice and all the angst that comes with growing up. Everything from Bella trying to be more feminine by wearing lipstick, but still being true to her tomboyish self and her inner thoughts are just icing on a charming cake that is Bella.
Excerpt from "How to Paint a House"
So I went to the front door, and with a deep breath, I opened it.
I don't know what I was expecting? I guess based on the handsome doctor, I was expecting someone decent looking, cute even, maybe even as handsome as his father. But I was not expecting the boy that was standing in my door. The boy that was standing in my door was like nothing I had ever seen before. He was spectacular. He glowed. His face and body and hair and eyes and smile all came together to make this most amazing looking human. And he was standing in my door, smiling at me with a startling smile…
And then he talked.
"Hello, I'm Edward Cullen. I'm here to paint the house," he said in this silky smooth voice. He had emerald green eyes that sort of smiled when he talked, and a thatch of light bronze hair pushed back into a haphazard pile on his head.
I needed a moment.
"Just…one sec," I eked out, holding up a finger to him, my eyes wandering to his muscled smooth arm through his white t-shirt, resting against the door frame.
I closed the door behind me.
Then I turned my back and pressed it against the front door, and slid down it. I was swooning. Like a Victorian debutante, falling onto her chez. I was swooning. I had never felt so much like a fifteen year old girl in my entire life. I could have died.
He was miraculous. He was spectacular. He was… outside.
Oh, God.
I rose quickly on wobbly legs and opened the door. I tried to look past him so I could get my words out, but that didn't work…
I looked right at him, and audibly gulped. "Sorry. Something was weird with the door," I said in a high pitched voice that I had never even heard my vocal chords make before.
I don't know what I was expecting? I guess based on the handsome doctor, I was expecting someone decent looking, cute even, maybe even as handsome as his father. But I was not expecting the boy that was standing in my door. The boy that was standing in my door was like nothing I had ever seen before. He was spectacular. He glowed. His face and body and hair and eyes and smile all came together to make this most amazing looking human. And he was standing in my door, smiling at me with a startling smile…
And then he talked.
"Hello, I'm Edward Cullen. I'm here to paint the house," he said in this silky smooth voice. He had emerald green eyes that sort of smiled when he talked, and a thatch of light bronze hair pushed back into a haphazard pile on his head.
I needed a moment.
"Just…one sec," I eked out, holding up a finger to him, my eyes wandering to his muscled smooth arm through his white t-shirt, resting against the door frame.
I closed the door behind me.
Then I turned my back and pressed it against the front door, and slid down it. I was swooning. Like a Victorian debutante, falling onto her chez. I was swooning. I had never felt so much like a fifteen year old girl in my entire life. I could have died.
He was miraculous. He was spectacular. He was… outside.
Oh, God.
I rose quickly on wobbly legs and opened the door. I tried to look past him so I could get my words out, but that didn't work…
I looked right at him, and audibly gulped. "Sorry. Something was weird with the door," I said in a high pitched voice that I had never even heard my vocal chords make before.
Do you remember that feeling? You will relive it again through Bella. You can't help but laugh or tear at her inner thoughts while she goes through the ups and downs of being a teenager discovering herself and the angst of a first crush and first love.Another character I'm loving right now is Bella's father, Charlie. To put it simply, he is a great dad. He's overprotective, but so loving and open. I like that Charlie makes sure to communicate with Bella and reminds her in his way that she can tell him anything.
I can't wait to read the complete story and see this Bella and Edward's HEA.
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